Media pitch and feedback

This is my pitch for a band's song i decided to use,
I would have given more detail on is what my music video's conventions are as i didn't talk a lot about them.
The creativity of the pitch could have been a bit fuller and I could have been louder but all the slides worked will and didn't take long to load up anything.
I feel like i should have used the song from unsigned.com instead of YouTube as the YouTube's version is not a good quality , as there was a lot of shuffling.
The audience found that the idea of a black and white music video with an angel was a strength as they didn't really ask any questions about it, and they seemed to enjoy the pitch.
The audience seemed like the idea was going down the surrealism pitch way was not for the music video and the age range was too much of a gap as the children would maybe not find it interesting, and the gender department of AGILE.
If I could redo the pitch again I would change the beginning part of the music video to make it so that the little animations plays on a loop and starts up automatically, I would add more about the Andrew Goodwin theory, the male gaze and the star persona, add more flare to the images and to add more videos and images to it while adding. Looking back on it, I noticed I was not very loud while presenting and didn't really show the excitement I needed to, and also I didn't seem very energetic as I should have been.